ok, mi ultimo adios.... hehe lol...kayo na po ba ni ate sakua0chan? ako lang po ba ang hindi nakakaalam?
ok, here is my one and only comment/suggestion here....:
the eyes do really have a life in here... but, you may remove the outer glow... it doesn't fit the image... anyway it looks nice...

to be honest kuya dark, I don't feel anylife here...*sigh* sorry po...
still, put some life in coloring your doujinshi...
that's all, but you've made a good one here, also the skecth one...
rate:
7/10
reasons: hehe in love po ba iakw?

nothing more to say kuya, except for the background...
nicework...
just improve the background.. something is not right with the background to the image, as if I have some astigmatism...*sniff* but i don't have any eye problems...

do I have to give a comment here kuya dark?
anyway, same comment(s) on what you did before but I'll add more...
same scan I think, right? so, same comments as before... hehehe
comments
1. Just like the comments on your older version(the legs doesn't have the right angle, width and height? (I think)and you almost show the innocent girl's panty, right? poor girl(you can be accused of child abuse and sexually abuse... *sigh*

2. the eyes doesn't have the life, you just make its flats, no more highlights and shadings and morely, I don't sense any life in her eyes... * I don't agree with some members here...*

3. you need to make the shading and highlights more detailed, and some shades here are not meant to be there (just figure it out what are the shades that I meant... I don't want to explain every detils)... *sigh* *searching for a place to hide*

4. do something about her chest, the uniform makes an illusions of having 3, you know what I mean... the one on the upper of the necktie...

5. look closely on the neck

6. You miss some part of a human body.. the ears... don't tell me that it is hiden on the hair, 'coz it doesn't give me the perception that it was hidden on the hair, try to analyze the illusion of the hair and the shading... and prefer to number 5

suggestion(s):
1. You needto work more on this image... especially with the figure and body anatomy...
2. use some tricks on how you can bring a masterpiece in to life.... you have to put ll of your emotions and passions in your work...

compliment
1. you almost makea 3-dversion here but, it is only a semi 3-d, nicework

P.S.
kuya dark, I'm very very sory for my comments and suggestion, I know that ayumi is one of your favorite doujinshi... I don't want to spoil this one..

so, I'm ver vey sorry kuya, you can scolled me if you want to...
I know that my comments and suggstions are getting far this time... i'm very very sorry kuya...
*sniff*
*hiding on the edge of nothingness err under the bed po pala......*
sorry for my harsh words and comments and suggestions... I'm very very sorry.....*sniff*
*hiding*

uhmmm..... *thinking...*
don't be mad at me ate....
here goes nothing...

first of all.... i have nothing more to say, 'coz they already say it.. right?
so, here are my comment and suggestions....
don't be mad at me ate.... *hiding under the bed o_O *
comments:
1. did you find it that the shading of the girl doesn't match the moon's light????
2. the wing doesn't align with the girl, but it is not that noticeable...
3. it is a nice work, and soothing somehow...

suggestions:
1. you may put the moon on the upper-left side so that the shading will match the light of the moon...
2. about the wing, put it a little bit lower.. right at the very back(align it with the shoulder)... just like in the anime of "aile's grise"
3. make the sky a little bit darker since it is night (because of the moon) but if you are pertaining to other planets, you may leave it as is..
4. try to make the moons circumference a little bit glowy to show the overwhelming power and nice aura of the moon.. (since i always stare the moon everynight when there is a moon) *that is just my opinion

Note:
sorry ate, I'm very very sorry if my comments and suggestions are harsh...
I'm very very sorry ate... *sniff

huwag na po ikaw magagalit ate athena... paumanhin po...

nice drawing but it really looks like the character on culture crash. .. heheh
anyway, you do relly have the talents unlike me *sniff*
i wish I can make something like that....

nice work ate, keep up the goodwork. . .

Now I'm finish giving comments and suggestions.... hope that there willbe more works of yours. . . I'll look forward for it. . .

the girl seems so sad... i think...
anyway, it is a nice doujinshi in crayons?? i think...
but seriously it do really looks nice....

keep up the good work ate...

one more to go!

nice doujinshi ate, did you use crayons or something???

anyway,if you use crayons, the outcome do really looks nice.. hehehe
and it do really looks pretty... kawaii!!!!! hehehe

nice work ate, 3 more to go... hehehe

she looks like tsubasa on .hack/sign... with some combination of kurapika on HxH
hehehe....
anyway, she do really looks like a girl and a boy... just like what it said on the anime "yakumo tatsuo"
a genderless face...
but it do really looks like a girl to me, but I can't explain it how or why... hehehe

nice sketch ate, hope that i can make something like that...

nice sketch ate aica...
suggestions:
1. try to put some highlights and shadings if you don't have any plan to color it. . .
2. if you plan to color it, put some lively color for the chracters...

comments:
1. there is something wrong about the bench. . . try to look for the perspective and you'll know what i mean... hehe

sorry for my comments and suggestions... i didn't mean to hurt your feelings or someyhing. . .

nice sketch.... *I hope that my family is like that when I was born. . . * anyway... overall, looks nice... and above all it's so warm and nice....
comments and suggestions...
1. paumanhin po kung ngayon lang po ako nakapag comment sa mga sub mo po kuya... sandali lng po ako dito...
2. byebye po.. wala po ako masabi... hehehe *speechless....

ang ganda po kuya lapuk...
comment and suggestion...
1. too foggy or smoky?
2. it is much cooler if you use light blue instea of green?
3. ang innocent po ng babae na malungkot po ang dating... ung babae po ba ang malungkot o ikaw po? sometimes, the artists emotions are passed down to his/her masterpiece... that's what I think....

nice one... this one is one of a kind fine image... nothing more nothing less.....

nice work but eventually, the same comments and suggestion as the other two version, moreover, the dress of thegirl seems to be pixelated... I think, or because of the shading of pencils? at saka, di po ata masyadong nakaakma ung size nila sa background... medyo di po makatotohanan since na nasa grasss sila, dapat medyo may foreground na grass sa harap nila... puro nasa likod nila ung mga grass... pasensya po sa comments ko po....
other comments:
sinabi na po ni kuya redblitskrieg

nice wall, good blending with the background, and what else.... your my master, so I won't complain since there is nothing to complain... hehehe

wow, cute na mido ban, ang galing...
comments and suggestion....
1. lagyan mo po ng highlights and shadings...
2. good detailed on lines...
3. unique 3/4 scale of mido ban...
4. don't do that again on your class, you might be caught and your work would be destroyed and thrown into the trash can... I also do that when I was bored of our teacher, but I don't draw, I just write or stare on the wall...
5. If you have problem with el filibusterismo, just ask me, and I'll help you as long as I can...

nice work ate athena, btw, hi po... hmmm.... the sketch is good, and the highlights and shadings are good...
comments and suggestions(wag po ikaw magagalit ate.... kung may naisulat po ako ate na masakit, paumanhin po....)
1. lagyan mo po ate ng mas malawak na detailed...
2. ung mga shadings mo po, ikalat mo po, gumamit po iakw ng daliri mo po o kaya po ay cotton, para di po puro linya ung skecth...
3 that's all po ate, wag po ikaw magagalit sa akin, alam ko po na wala po akong karapatan para mag suggest dahil di po ako marunong gumuhit...

niec wall, you put a color that brightens your art, but still, the comments and suggestion is the same as your sketch, remember? nice background...

much better than the first one, but as I said, a male ninja or assasin might fit in, not a school girl.... hehehe sorry about my comment...

shading and higlights are good but not enought details... I think...
comments and suggestions...
-di po gaano maganda ang pagkakagawa sa kamay ng lalake at binti ng babae...
-masyado po maliit ung braso hanggang kamay ng llake
-napalaki naman po ung binti ng babae, siguro po kung meroon po ikaw na ginawang mas detailed na shading sa binti bka po medyo maremedyohan pa po kuya...
-ikalat mo po ung shading mo po kuya para di po nakikita ugn mga linya sa shading mo po...

NOTE:
pasensya na po sa aking mga pinagsasabi... gomenasai...

more simple compared the other one...
-an excerpt from kuya redblitzkrieg...
suggestion and comments...
- you overdo the lines of lights thing....
-I like the floor... hehehe:D

nice, typical layout of a wallpaper but it results in a much better than your green green grass wall....

nice wall but the tall grasses seems to be a little bit exaggerated.. I think.... anyway nice wall... paumanhin po sa aking mga pinagsasabi kuya jak...

nice wall, but do you think that it is a little bit too colorful? anyway, art is a form where people put they're hearts into they're work, whatever the result will be, art will be on your heart..
comments:
1. the cluds on the floor or fog? you can make it more transparent so that it will turn into an cold ice smoke effect just like in a stage play...
2. too much color... on the BG and too much stars..... I think...
paumanhin po sa mga pinagsasabi ko po.... patawarin mo po ako kuya....